I am 1 of the Marianne Williamson new enrollees.I am male,72 and retired junior college instructor in physiology.i had very much enjoyed and was thoroughly inspired by your conversation with ,Marianne.You are looking for some communication,some insights regarding the dialoque you have written regarding your 2 main characters.To begin,it is without any prior knowledge or exposure to the prior chapters,that my opinions are formed.I have no knowledge of the context relating to the mission,the stakes or rules in the end goals or the relationship of the 2 main characters.The written words and dialoque quite eloquently and succintly characterize the inner analysis of the one character to share his sense of a presence that was having some form of telepathic communication with him.I was able to see the outcomes possible (through his inner rrflective analysis)but didnt really have any sense,emotionally,as to what he felt about having this apprehension to share,to communicate and ultimately to experience the edification of an inner thought to another soul.The whole premise seemed to be the express need to commune,to experience through shared realities a larger more anchored reality that only at times is accomplised through the risks,faith,trust in ourselves to confront this inner experience with the outside world.The dialoque does convey that the disclosure to his mission companion was ultimately received,validated and reasurred him that we will do what we can,and it will be enough to get us through to the end.The metaphysical allusions to consciousness,to the constraints of male relationship roles comes through clearly.Although we know that the 2 men are united and allied and the sharing of the one character has strengthend them as a working team,we the reader dont really know how each man felt about this decision to deepen,enrich their own individual resevoirs of strength,self-identity in this shared community of exposing ones authentic self to another.To end,through your construction of your portal,your openended loop to communicate; you are actually achieving in real time the validation,the support and the clarity that your character was looking for and providing us your reader the ability to strengthen our own thoughts on these subjects.Thank you,I will definitely read the prior chapters.
Thank you JB very much for your thoughtful comments. Comments like this are very helpful in shaping the story and I really appreciate the time and effort you put into writing them. I'm curious if any of your observations will change or any of your lingering questions will be answered after you have a chance to read the preceding four chapters. If so, I would love to hear about it. Thanks again, Ron
I am 1 of the Marianne Williamson new enrollees.I am male,72 and retired junior college instructor in physiology.i had very much enjoyed and was thoroughly inspired by your conversation with ,Marianne.You are looking for some communication,some insights regarding the dialoque you have written regarding your 2 main characters.To begin,it is without any prior knowledge or exposure to the prior chapters,that my opinions are formed.I have no knowledge of the context relating to the mission,the stakes or rules in the end goals or the relationship of the 2 main characters.The written words and dialoque quite eloquently and succintly characterize the inner analysis of the one character to share his sense of a presence that was having some form of telepathic communication with him.I was able to see the outcomes possible (through his inner rrflective analysis)but didnt really have any sense,emotionally,as to what he felt about having this apprehension to share,to communicate and ultimately to experience the edification of an inner thought to another soul.The whole premise seemed to be the express need to commune,to experience through shared realities a larger more anchored reality that only at times is accomplised through the risks,faith,trust in ourselves to confront this inner experience with the outside world.The dialoque does convey that the disclosure to his mission companion was ultimately received,validated and reasurred him that we will do what we can,and it will be enough to get us through to the end.The metaphysical allusions to consciousness,to the constraints of male relationship roles comes through clearly.Although we know that the 2 men are united and allied and the sharing of the one character has strengthend them as a working team,we the reader dont really know how each man felt about this decision to deepen,enrich their own individual resevoirs of strength,self-identity in this shared community of exposing ones authentic self to another.To end,through your construction of your portal,your openended loop to communicate; you are actually achieving in real time the validation,the support and the clarity that your character was looking for and providing us your reader the ability to strengthen our own thoughts on these subjects.Thank you,I will definitely read the prior chapters.
Thank you JB very much for your thoughtful comments. Comments like this are very helpful in shaping the story and I really appreciate the time and effort you put into writing them. I'm curious if any of your observations will change or any of your lingering questions will be answered after you have a chance to read the preceding four chapters. If so, I would love to hear about it. Thanks again, Ron